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- Wed Mar 31, 2004 6:02 am
- Forum: Legends of the Southwest
- Topic: "Fight or Flight"
- Replies: 8
- Views: 14495
- Thu Mar 18, 2004 4:32 pm
- Forum: Legends of the Southwest
- Topic: Afternoon Tea:Feedback
- Replies: 3
- Views: 11084
- Thu Mar 18, 2004 12:47 pm
- Forum: Legends of the Southwest
- Topic: Afternoon Tea
- Replies: 0
- Views: 12611
Afternoon Tea
This isn't so much a story, as a single scene interaction piece. I wrote this about two years ago if the properties tab in Word is reliable (my memory certainly isn't). The first reasoning behind writing it was to explore the potential technologies that may be keeping vigilantes alive, so most of t...
- Mon Mar 08, 2004 7:09 am
- Forum: Legends of the Southwest
- Topic: New England Run Feedback
- Replies: 2
- Views: 10030
New England Run Feedback
Firstly, I'm glad to see this story being posted again. I enjoyed it first time round, and I've since forgotten most of it, so it's good to have it available. What kind of feedback are you looking for on this one? I'd guess you're not keen on rewriting huge swathes of it, given it's age. I notice yo...
- Mon Mar 08, 2004 6:26 am
- Forum: Legends of the Southwest
- Topic: Origins of Lightfoot Feedback
- Replies: 18
- Views: 30573
- Mon Mar 01, 2004 4:06 am
- Forum: Legends of the Southwest
- Topic: Track n Snack (working title)
- Replies: 10
- Views: 18433
Formatting- yeah I know the convention for modern business correspondence is line between each paragraph, but I prefer the older style of tabs. Tabs don't work in HTML as we all know, and clearly my attempts to fool the page into showing multiple spaces (4 after each _ ) failed, so I'll have to swit...
- Fri Feb 27, 2004 4:47 pm
- Forum: Legends of the Southwest
- Topic: Track n Snack (working title)
- Replies: 10
- Views: 18433
Track n Snack (working title)
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- Fri Feb 27, 2004 3:22 am
- Forum: Legends of the Southwest
- Topic: Kids N' Vigs: Feedback
- Replies: 71
- Views: 102427
I wasn't confused by the character jumping, I just felt it broke the flow of the story- part of that being because I felt there was too much explanation of every action. I don't remember ever reading a book which used a similar technique, so I'd consider you pioneers in that regard. A series which u...
- Thu Feb 26, 2004 4:53 am
- Forum: Legends of the Southwest
- Topic: Kids N' Vigs: Feedback
- Replies: 71
- Views: 102427
Longer feedback. I must qualify these comments by stating that I don't actually know what I'm talking about when it comes to writing fiction. I won't post spoilers, but I'll say that the outline story was a very good idea, that built on the characters from the previous story, in a broadly reaonable ...
- Wed Feb 25, 2004 5:28 pm
- Forum: Legends of the Southwest
- Topic: Kids N' Vigs: Feedback
- Replies: 71
- Views: 102427
- Wed Feb 25, 2004 6:56 am
- Forum: Legends of the Southwest
- Topic: Origins of Lightfoot Feedback
- Replies: 18
- Views: 30573
Looks okay so far, but not enough going on in the story (yet) for me to make any real comments on. The segments do work on the level of getting inside the character, but there's next to no narrative. Saying that, that's the kind of thing I've written. I'm hoping for some interraction in future episo...