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Gah!

It was originally meant as a standalone slice of life thing. Stuff is in progress now, but don't hold your breath

This isn't so much a story, as a single scene interaction piece. I wrote this about two years ago if the properties tab in Word is reliable (my memory certainly isn't). The first reasoning behind writing it was to explore the potential technologies that may be keeping vigilantes alive, so most of t...

Firstly, I'm glad to see this story being posted again. I enjoyed it first time round, and I've since forgotten most of it, so it's good to have it available. What kind of feedback are you looking for on this one? I'd guess you're not keen on rewriting huge swathes of it, given it's age. I notice yo...

That's a good point, actually. With the story I'm currently working on, I'm hoping to include "adult themes", but I'm not sure whether it'll work, it'll seem gratuitous, if it will just make for uncomfortable reading on an Interstate 76 forum, or all of the above :) Now, though, I have to ...

Formatting- yeah I know the convention for modern business correspondence is line between each paragraph, but I prefer the older style of tabs. Tabs don't work in HTML as we all know, and clearly my attempts to fool the page into showing multiple spaces (4 after each _ ) failed, so I'll have to swit...

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I wasn't confused by the character jumping, I just felt it broke the flow of the story- part of that being because I felt there was too much explanation of every action. I don't remember ever reading a book which used a similar technique, so I'd consider you pioneers in that regard. A series which u...

Longer feedback. I must qualify these comments by stating that I don't actually know what I'm talking about when it comes to writing fiction. I won't post spoilers, but I'll say that the outline story was a very good idea, that built on the characters from the previous story, in a broadly reaonable ...

Short feedback.

Longer feedback to follow. Stayed up late to finish reading it, so there's nothing bad here.

Looks okay so far, but not enough going on in the story (yet) for me to make any real comments on. The segments do work on the level of getting inside the character, but there's next to no narrative. Saying that, that's the kind of thing I've written. I'm hoping for some interraction in future episo...